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The End Of The World
Millie clutched her throat, with only a single drop of water left in her flask she had to make it last. Her wavy blonde hair was matted, caked in blood and dust. Left for dead, that was some blow to her head.
She had been afraid of taking a gap year but Frederique had convinced her to go. She had trusted him, this was how she had been repaid.
She glanced around, her vision hazy, it was like the end of the world. In the distance the mountain glowed, whispering ‘Not the end, the beginning.’ She had to make it.
Hope you liked it
Bettina x
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If Frederique's the one who did this to her, he's quite the cad.
ReplyDeleteI liked this character, she is made of strong stuff. Frederique is in for a shock.
ReplyDeleteExciting stuff. Full of possibilities.
ReplyDeleteDear Bettina,
ReplyDeleteI love her determination. Federique's a cad and I hope he's caught. Well done.
Shalom
Rochelle
I also love Millie's determination in the face of adversity.Great writing, Bettina.
ReplyDeleteBest wishes,
Moon
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Very nicely done.
ReplyDeleteShe's a tough one, I hope she makes it.
ReplyDeleteI hope she makes it. You write her determination well.
ReplyDeleteVery well written! I hope there's a nice little cantina over the hill. :)
ReplyDeleteEven though this is short fiction, I'd suggest you divide your tale into three paragraphs, separating past ("She had been...:") from present reality.
Christine/Swallow
Yes you are right! Thank you
DeleteI'm getting a Beatrix Kiddo vibe from this Millie character. Frederique sure has something nasty coming towards him. Good one, Bettina.
ReplyDeleteWow! Thank you for the kind words :)
DeleteVery well character sketched.
ReplyDeleteThe power of possitive thought. She'll get there alright.
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You go, Millie, and kick some Frederique butt when you get there!
ReplyDeleteWhat a great character! Well done!
I, too, love her determination. Frederique won't know what hit him. Good story.
ReplyDeleteI do like it. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThis is a GREAT opening for a thriller/adventure/mystery novel!
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