Wednesday, 18 October 2017

Flash Fiction - The Loving Tree

Here is this week's 100 word story based on the following picture prompt

Photo credit @ Sandra Crook


The Loving Tree


‘I love you Charlotte,’ Austin whispered as he held her tiny hand in his.
Charlotte beamed in delight. ‘Why don’t we carve our initials in the tree, as a symbol of our everlasting love?’
Austin pulled back in horror at the suggestion. ‘What? Why would we do that?’
Charlotte’s face crumpled in disappointment. ‘You don’t really love me, do you?’

Austin couldn’t believe what he was hearing, why would anyone want to harm a tree? Cutting its bark would allow a gateway for pathogens. He was quite disgusted in Charlotte. No, she was right, he couldn’t love her, not now.


Hope you enjoyed this story
Bettina x

Many thanks to Rochelle for this week's prompt. If you want to read more stories based on this picture - click here

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Posted by Bettina@BeautySwot at 12:45
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23 comments:

  1. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields18 October 2017 at 12:55

    Dear Bettina,

    That was certainly a unique take. Austin must be a scientist or a tree doctor. Sounds like Charlotte unwittingly spoiled the romantic moment. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Bettina@BeautySwot18 October 2017 at 14:06

      Thanks for stopping by Rochelle! Poor Charlotte, it could be the end for their romance...

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  2. Iain Kelly18 October 2017 at 13:42

    I think Charlotte might be best to get out of that relationship now rather than later. Austin doesn't seem the loving kind.

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    1. Bettina@BeautySwot18 October 2017 at 14:05

      Haha Iain! I thought you may have come down on Austin's side... :)

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  3. James18 October 2017 at 14:55

    Interesting take on an age old tradition.

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  4. moon18 October 2017 at 15:56

    Now, he needs to try harder to please Charlotte( and make her love him) if he really loves her.
    Nice story, Bettina.

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    1. Bettina@BeautySwot18 October 2017 at 16:39

      I am not sure he can Moon, Charlotte doesn't appear to share his beliefs :)

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  5. Anonymous18 October 2017 at 16:04

    I like the reversal of the standard trope.

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  6. C. E. Ayr18 October 2017 at 16:16

    Maybe Austin has read Roald Dahl's Sound Machine.
    Good to find out early if you are incompatible.

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  7. Sandra Crook18 October 2017 at 18:27

    I think they're probably not compatible, you know. Better to find out now, though.

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  8. Varadharajan18 October 2017 at 19:42

    Nah! They wouldn't have worked out. Glad the tree got spared. Nice twist on the old tale, Bettina.

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  9. Anonymous19 October 2017 at 09:39

    Hah, this made me laugh. How fickle Austin is!

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  10. Keith's Ramblings19 October 2017 at 11:41

    It was clearly never meant to be! Cleverly told Bettina.

    Click to read my FriFic!

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  11. Anonymous19 October 2017 at 17:35

    A nice clean tale.

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  12. Scott19 October 2017 at 20:17

    People don't usually think about the effects of what they do, do they?
    She was in love - he, well not, what is he? lost?
    Scott
    Mine: https://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2017/10/19/from-tree-to-shining-tree-friday-fictioneers/

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  13. Gardenlover20 October 2017 at 12:05

    Boy, that was a short romance. I think he was more sensitive than the tree. Nicely done, Bettina. - Russell

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  14. liz young20 October 2017 at 12:56

    I'm with Austin, though graffiti is everywhere and has been for centuries. Thisk of the stonemason's initials on castle walls!

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