About Last Night
I gently push open the door and tentatively enter. I need to see this
for myself. The house, my sanctuary, has been turned upside down. Absolutely
nothing has been left untouched. I feel sick as I make my way to the kitchen. The
mouth-wateringly expensive, stunning crystal bowl, a precious wedding gift that
takes pride of place on the dining table, is cracked. A strange sticky residue lines
the edges. My favourite plant, mutilated, leaves carelessly tossed aside. Devastated
at the damage, I take a deep, angry, breath before calling upstairs.
‘Chloe, what the hell happened in here last night?’
Bettina x
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Dear Bettina,
ReplyDeleteThe thought of the bowl with a crack in it leaves me feeling sick, too. Then you turned the story on its head with the last line. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
It's funny how many stories about domestic (or other) violence have been inspired by this simple image.
ReplyDeleteChloe is in big trouble - incidently my daughter is a Chloe - I may shout this exact line in years to come! :-)
ReplyDeleteWell written, Bettina. You make the loss and damage feel personal. You create a sense of desecration about the damage, because the house is the narrator's sanctuary.
ReplyDeleteI wonder what did happen.
ReplyDeleteOne of your best, Bettina. Very well done.
ReplyDeleteWonderfully put together.
ReplyDeleteSomeone has some explaining to do! Nice one Bettina
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Kids! They have so little respect for parents' property sometimes. Well written.
ReplyDeleteVery vivid story. Chloe has some explaining to do, I think, Jilly, Sugar on the Bee.
ReplyDeleteI thought it was vandals...then found out it was Chloe. Yikes! Good job.
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