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Wednesday, 17 October 2018

Falling - Flash Fiction

This week's 100 word story based on the following picture prompt


PHOTO PROMPT © Jilly Funell
Falling

Laura froze, she had been here before. This building was the image of the one she saw every time she closed her eyes. She turned to leave but Ben was standing behind her.

'Great idea for a first date huh?’ Pleased, he flashed her tickets for afternoon tea at the Sky Restaurant. ‘The highest vantage point in Europe.’

Panic set in, she clutched her throat, her breath quickening, face draining of colour. Chatting to Ben online she had fallen in love, but the nightly premonitions of her falling to her death could not be ignored.

‘No, I can’t.’ she gasped.



I hope you enjoyed my latest story 

Bettina x


* With thanks to Rochelle for the picture prompt. If you wish to read more stories based on the prompt click here
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16 comments:

  1. J Hardy Carroll17 October 2018 at 13:25

    Fear of heights is a real thing all right.

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  2. Iain Kelly17 October 2018 at 13:28

    Poor Ben should've asked how she felt about heights online before arranging the date!

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  3. Sandra Crook17 October 2018 at 14:35

    Go with your instincts, I say. Nice one.

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  4. C. E. Ayr17 October 2018 at 14:37

    Go on, Laura, they might have scones!

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  5. Dale17 October 2018 at 17:30

    It could be cold feet or it could be her subconscious screaming at her...

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  6. Neil MacDonald17 October 2018 at 17:31

    A battle between nightmares and dreams! My guess is she walked away.

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  7. Penny Gadd17 October 2018 at 18:15

    You've made this very believable, Bettina. If I were in Laura's shoes there's no way I'd enter that building.

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  8. Linda17 October 2018 at 19:18

    I SO sympathize! Great feelings here.

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  9. Jo Hawk17 October 2018 at 23:48

    Your piece made me wonder if it was just the tower or this guy Ben who is giving her the nightmares. Either way I vote for her to run. Nicely told.

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  10. Abhijit Ray18 October 2018 at 03:31

    Premonition can be tricky. It cannot be ignored nor is it logical to continue inspite of it. If it turned out to be correct, she would not be there to tell her story. If it turned out to be wrong, she would lose a trusted friend.

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  11. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields18 October 2018 at 10:51

    Dear Bettina,

    If he really loves her he'll take her somewhere close to the ground. Or she might be correct in just walking away. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  12. Brenda Cox18 October 2018 at 17:27

    You created well an ominous feel. She needs to listen to her dreams and walk away.

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  13. theministryofshrawleywalks18 October 2018 at 22:24

    Yep, its a real fear, and I think only increases with age! Good piece

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  14. Anonymous19 October 2018 at 10:34

    She has those dreams for a reason. As Brenda Sue says, she needs to listen to them. Jilly, Sugar on the Bee.

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  15. Subroto20 October 2018 at 09:21

    This is the stuff nightmares are made of. Looks like she preferred to listen to her intuition and walked away.

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  16. lisarey1990@gmail.com21 October 2018 at 19:01

    This piece is filled to the brim with intrigue.

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